The Thread Moved Downward

Posts : 150 Karma : 81 Location : South Carolina

The Thread Moved Downward

Rhyming in prose, vocabulary flexed.
I pour my soul into a literary text,
I post on this forum, a poets test,
The thread moves down; the poet is vexed.

Does no one see my rhyming perfection?
The careful words I wrote, inviting reflection?
Eagerly awaiting the crowds affection.
The thread moves downward; sad rejection.

“Oh Dear God!, What does it take?”
To move the masses for a comment to make!
Perhaps they are sleeping? No longer awake?
Or is my masterpiece simply a fake?

Posts : 2215 Karma : 233 Location : Vermont

*exalt* Simply for putting into words what so many of us often feel. Heh, my karma at TPS has been stalled for months now, too. :pout:

Posts : 1277 Karma : 255 Location : Devon, England.

Wonderful stuff, you really hit the button with this, speaking of buttons Jamie I think my Karma must be stalled too. I think I shoudf have a least 500 more than I do.See if you cant get the wonderful H to bump mine up a bit.
Anyway great poem my friend.

Posts : 377 Karma : 28

LOL, I'm pretty sure this one won't get rejected, I enjoyed it very much, PC, the second stanza really made me laugh! Very Happy

Subject: Re: The Thread Moved Downward February 8th 2011, 6:43 pm

amazingly clever.. I LOVE poems about writing and what we think as we are waiting on the reactions of our work..

~ Daniel

ps - Foggy, I thought you knew that I bought your karma from Fergie.. I'm in the process of buying your car from her..

Posts : 1443 Karma : 327

You write nothing that is "fake", pcshogun. We all in the same boat, all feel it, so please don't be vexed. The word choices, topic, rhyme and flow in this poem earn Exalt! H x

Posts : 1832 Karma : 359 Location : amongst the stars ~

....and it's an exalt from me too - fantastic write xxxxx

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