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 "A shooting star, "

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Ris Yerg



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Location: Jerusalem, Israel.

PostSubject: "A shooting star, "   Thu 2 Feb 2012 - 4:46


In its dazzling instant,
Hisses with lust
"Sssexy!"
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Marise



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PostSubject: Re: "A shooting star, "   Wed 25 Apr 2012 - 8:16
Great use of alliteration here.
the short sharp sounds of the 'i' fit perfectly with the sly 's's
I imagined a snake saying that last line, its tongue flicking short sharp movements in that sly way they have.
It adds a sense of danger to the beauty of the star
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